Danny’s Story – Chapter 5 – What do you think?

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I am currently on chapter 45 of this. It is still going along nicely. Obviously this is the first draft so it will have to be tidied up a bit. I am writing at a fast rate and doing two books at the same time.

I would be grateful for any suggestions. I can address issues in the rewrite. It is hard when you are subjective. An objective eye can spot things more easily.

Chapter 5 – Diane and Bowie

It was very romantic. They met by the fridge they shared. He, all bleary eyed, hair all over the place, yawning and rubbing his belly, emerging from his door in crumpled T-shirt and underpants, her looking immaculate in an clinging black dress with long black hair tumbling over her shoulders.

They both froze, shocked at bumping into each other so unexpectedly.

Diane had been away in Birmingham, staying with friends…

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